Problems with my paper
The introduction does not have a clearly stated thesis and three main points.
The paper does not have a centered title.
Avoid the 2nd person “you”
The last sentence of body paragraph 1 might be able to serve as a topic sentence if you move it to the beginning of the paragraph?
Similarly, the 3rd sentence in Body paragraph 2 serves as a topic sentence for the whole paragraph. Maybe combine it with the first sentence in this paragraph and move it forward?
This paper does not meet the length or formatting requirement. It needs to have 5 paragraphs. There are requirements that need to be met for each paragraph.
As you continue to revise this paper, look for grammar errors and awkward wording.